OK I know you will probably look at this and chuckle to yourselves about how this looks, but remember this is my first ever try at rendering anything on photoshop! Im 15, have no idea what im doing... but ok..

This is the sketch I scanned in (badly drawn)
http://i262.photobucket.com/albums/ii113/SJROBZY/first.jpg

then I did the lines , used a paint brush to try and colour it in, ok dont laugh!
http://i262.photobucket.com/albums/ii113/SJROBZY/coloured.jpg
LOL

what could I do to make it look more real, less ameutor, and to make the whole presentation look better

Its cool and not bad for a first attempt. :)

i wasnt quite sure what to expect. but as a 1st time ps render, not bad. keep figuring out ps. its f-ing awesome! as im sure u kno.

haha, yer I do know, But I just cannot figure out the pen tool! thats why the lines look poor